Thursday, April 26, 2012

Blog #10 - Dialogue to Move the Story Forward

Sorry, this is kind of brief...
ANDREW
Have you ever thought about going back to school? It has been a while since you have gone.

HAYLEY
NO! I will never go back to that rotten place. I can't go there and let people see the way that I look! It would be humiliating!

ANDREW
But you were so popular and everything! Everyone liked you of at least acted like they did. Don't you miss all of your friends?

HAYLEY
Well, yeah. Of course I miss them, but I just don't want to go back. you wouldn't understand...

ANDREW
What wouldn't I understand? I know I have really only known you for about two months, but I feel like it's been so much longer! We spend almost eight hours a day together once I get home from school. Why is it that big of a deal if you go back? What are you afraid of?

HAYLEY
Nothing! I just don't want to be judged like this....

Blog #9 - Dialogue for Relationships with Characters

(Hayley's voice can be heard from in the trees, but she is not seen.)
HAYLEY
What are you doing?!

(Andrew stops with a very suprised look on his face. He did not expect to hear someone's voice while out coollecting food for his family. He begins looking all around and sees Hayley jump out of a tree wearing oversized clothing and the hood of her sweatshirt is pulled over her head so that one cannot see her face.)
ANDREW
Hayley Smith? Is that you? What are you doing out here? I haven't seen you in forever! (He gives a friendly smile)

HAYLEY
Yeah! Hey Andrew! I haven't seen you since middle school! We used to be such good friends! Its been a while. I didn't know you guys lived out here. Didn't you used to live on the street behind my house?
ANDREW
Yeah. We moved out of there a few years ago. Ever since my dad lost his job it's been really hard. Now our only source of income is whatever my mom gets while working at the diner four nights a week. It's been kinda hard but we make it work and I love it here in the woods in our small cabin home. Everything is so much easier. What are you doing out here? We usually don't see anyone in these woods.

HAYLEY
 I'm sorry about your dad. Thats gotta be hard. But me...I'm just...ummm...on a camping trip. I forgot a lot of my stuff at home that I need, but I'm doing alright so far.

ANDREW
Do you need anything else? Our house is right ove that hill if you want something.

HAYLEY
Thanks. I might take you up on that later.

Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Blog #8- Writing Good Dialogue

The three most important things:
1. In the script, it's important to reveal the characters' relationships to one another.
2. The script must move the story forward.
3. Keep the script intersesting with the dialogue; leave out stuff that doesn't need to be in there.

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Blog #7-Parts of The Hollywood Formula

Opening Scene: The first thing that one would see if this was ever turned into an actual screen play would be a the ourside of a large high school. The camera would zoom in until it got to the sign of the front of the school, at the sign, and all you see is the name of the school. The viewer would then hear the bell ring. After one hears the bell ring, it would then cut to a group of three pretty girls. They all think that they are the greatest thing that that school has, but there is one out of the three that clearly thinks she is the best of all. The viewer then sees a poor kid trip, fall, and drop all of his belonings. All that the self centered girls can do is laugh. While this child is picking up all of his loose papers, he sees three different guys walk up to the one in that group of girls who all give her a kiss and they tell eachother that they love eachother. The other two girls clearly do not feel comfortable with the situation, but go along with it for popularity. The viewer would see that this girl is obviously cheating on these three guys and none of the three guys have any idea. One then sees the other guy, still sitting on the ground collecting the last of his things. The last thing you see in the scene is the boys getting up and leaving.

Inciting Incident: At this part in the script is where all goes wrong for the protagonist, Hayley. That boy who dropped all of his things is the hall decided to show up at her house one night. He pretended to be nice to her and decided to bring her her favorite kind of tea from the near by coffee shop. Little did she know that the boy had put some sort of potion in it. After drinking the tea, she gets quite tired and tells the boy that she needs to go to sleep now and politely ushers him out the door. When she wakes up the next morning, she looks in the mirror and does not like what she sees. The porion that the boy put in the tea made her so hideous that not even she herself could look at it in the mirror. She calls the boy and he explains everything to her that she needs to know. After finding out what is going on, Hayley takes off into the woods where she thinks no one will ever find her or have to see her again.

Having Fun and Getting to Know Your Characters: At this point in the script, Hayley is off in the woods and doing her best to find a way in which she can stay there forever. It's not going so well for her and there are times that she contemplates going back home to tell her parents the truth. Anyway, she has met this guy from her high school, whose name is Andrew. The two are becoming good friends. Andrew is trying to teach Hayley how he and his family are living in the woods on such a little income, and he and his family have even offered to let her stay at their home. They are nice people and refuse to judge her based on the way that she looks.

Tuesday, April 17, 2012

Blog #6 - Script Outline

1. Set Up: The story takes place in a modern day high school in Southern California. The name of the school is not important and does not need to be mentioned. The story starts off in the school at the end of the school day when all the kids are just getting out of class. Hayley is with her two friends, Amber and Danielle, who she is always bossing around. Amber and Danielle are probably just as beautiful as Hayley, but are way nicer.

2. Inciting Incident: Because of what I am doing for my script, it is pretty clear what the inciting incident is. I am doing a twist on the well known movie and musical/play of Beauty and the Beast. Because enough people are sick of the way Hayley is acting and treating people, a quieter boy at school, Ryan, who is sick of the way he especially is treated, decides to change the way Hayley looks by putting a spell on her. The only way that the spell can be broken is if she can finally learn to treat everyone as equals and finds true love.

3. Some Rising Action: 1)Because she doesn't like the way that she looks, Hayley runs away to go live in the woods where she thinks no one will ever have to see her in her ugly state. 2)She meets a boy from her school, Andrew, who's family isn't very rich and is living in a small, beat up looking, cabin in the woods. She had no idea that he even existed. 3)Andrew brings Hayley home to his family and they help her in any way that they can. 4)Andrew and Hayley finally start becoming friends and Andrew starts teaching her how they survive on little income.

4. Description of Climax: At this part in the script, Hayley and Andrew get into a huge fight. Andrew tries to convince her to come back to school. She does not want this because she does not want people to judge her because of the way that she looks because she did it to so many others for so long.

5. Description of Falling Action: In this part of the screen play, she finally realizes that she can care about people and that every thing is not about the way people look. She becomes content with her new life in the woods where everything is much more simple. She is happy with the way that things are going between her and Andrew. She is happy to just have a frinds who she can talk to that is not going to judge her based on the way that she looks.

6. Resolution: In the end, everything works out like everyone might be able to predict that it would. Hayley ends up falling in love with Gordon. Because she ends up learning to accept people for who they are and not just by the way that they look. The whole point of the story is to help prove that there is more to love than looks and that true love should be based on something far more important than looks.

Wednesday, April 4, 2012

Blog #5 - The Revised Logline

When a beautiful, mean, self-centered girl is turned hideous, she must learn to love even the most unattractive of people, or stay in her ugly state forever.

Tuesday, April 3, 2012

Blog #4 - The Script Logline

When a beautiful, mean, self-centerd girl is turned hideous, she must learn to love even the most hideous person, or stay in her ugly state forever.